1. The writer did a lot of research, which aided to the essay.
2. The iPod was a good item to pick, because a lot of college students own them.
3. I liked how the writer explained the iPod just in case one of the readers does not know about it.
4. I liked how the writer chose to use word "simplicity" a lot. It was a very good choice of wording when describing Apple.
5. I agree that the iPod is an "icon" in American society.
6. It made me think about how much technology especially by Apple I own and have owned.
Why I am inert/unmoved....
1. I did like the research and history but sometimes it got to be a little too much.
2. I would have enjoyed if the writer mentioned their experiences with the iPod.
3. The writer spoke for Apple more than once. The writer basically told the reader what the intentions of the staff at Apple are. How does the writer know this?
4. The conclusion was very long. Usually in an essay the conclusion consists of only one paragraph.
5. The bracketed part of the title wasn't needed.
6. Although I liked the word "simplicity"...is the iPod really simple for everyone?
"1. I did like the research and history but sometimes it got to be a little too much. "
ReplyDeleteI actually agree. The author didn't get to the Large Subject aspect of the paper until the final two pages.